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Rumours and Speculation / Re: Warhammer: The Old World!
« Last post by Nutty on Today at 12:33:57 PM »
I'd be happy to see fantasy return; but it's a bit odd that they announced it 3 years in advance. Because;

A) that's a long time to keep a hype going.
B) everybody is going to know they spent 3+ years on it.. so all those mistakes are going to look extra silly ;D

It is pretty exciting news though; I wonder what it means for the models and factions.
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Rumours and Speculation / Warhammer: The Old World!
« Last post by Myen'Tal on Today at 12:00:39 PM »
You never thought anyone would tread upon the Old World again... but alas, the Old and New were never meant to fully entwine, but to exist side by side!!!

It's back! A NEW, IMPROVED, Warhammer Fantasy Battles Game, coming sometime after some years into the future.



Old World? New Warhammer!! - Warhammer Community

AND the hint drop of HYSH for AoS!!????

As a fan of both settings, I look forward to one day being able to play these side by side ;D.
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Projects Blog / Re: Conclaves of the Asur (Eidolon Resurgent)
« Last post by magenb on Yesterday at 03:34:43 PM »
Soul renders is look good so far  8).
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Projects Blog / Re: Conclaves of the Asur (Eidolon Resurgent)
« Last post by Myen'Tal on Yesterday at 11:13:21 AM »
So, it's been a little while, hasn't it ;D?

Sorry for the late post, and that there's not much to it at the moment. I was going to paint last weekend, but then I got sick as a dog and couldn't really be bothered to do anything but sleep lol.

I did build a Wild Drycha. I've made some progress on my Soulrender, which is definitely still WIP. I'm trying to figure out how I want to base the blue armor. I could use the regular silver highlights, or I could try something different like a neon green to kind of give it a more undersea feel.

I also managed to get another Reaver past the basing stage, but I didn't take pics. I hope to start painting again this weekend.



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General 40k / Re: Xmas box sets have been announced.
« Last post by Myen'Tal on November 13, 2019, 09:39:03 PM »
I've been looking at those AoS sets this year, as all of those boxes are simply killer!

But, I have a feeling that 2020 is the year of Tyrion and Teclis. Mark these words! ;D

Also for Skaven players, by the love of the Horned Rat, grab that Christmas box!
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Art & Fiction / Re: Born of Ashes and Embers (Ver. III, Chapter I Completed)
« Last post by Myen'Tal on November 13, 2019, 02:39:39 PM »
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It's been a while since I dipped my feet in writing and feedback, but your persistence deserves attention.

Hi Sir_Godspeed,

I appreciate you stopping by! That sentence alone means a lot ;D.

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First off - thanks for the enjoyable story. While it's the first chapters of presumably several, it does feel like somewhat of a finished arc - though I did grasp for some additional context at times. Even if the conflict was fairly clear, the barrage of names made it a bit difficult to keep it all in order at times.

Thanks! I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter overall.

As for the barrage of names, I figured that was going to be something that'd crop up at some-point. But I kind of wanted to experiment with it. I wasn't too happy with the previous iterations of the Zarquin Guard, because I felt that they had become an army of *red-shirts*, rather than something that any of the main characters would care about.

I figured lending out names and personalities to notable figures within the Zarquin Guard, and having them actually play roles in throughout the chapters, would give them more of the warrior brotherhood vibe that I envisioned.

However, the point you raise is a valid one. I did cram several names in the a small space, not even if you include the likes of Qarth and Qi. What would be your advice on trying to balance too-many-names as opposed to no-name-red-shirts? Perhaps I could have introduced them a bit more piecemeal or made them more distinct somehow.

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Speaking of context, I see you called this an original story, but I think I recognized the name Qarth from A Song of Ice And Fire? Is it set in that universe, or did you just borrow the name?

This is a universe that I've created, which is why I called it an original story. That said, and I know this is blasphemy, but I haven't read too much of the ASOIAF series. I did do a quick google search on it and I do realize now that Qarth is a Port City in Essos.

I can definitely see where the puzzlement is coming from ;) :P. The Dominion of Qarth, where this story is set in, was unintentionally given the same name as this Port City in ASOIAF.

I actually came up with the name due to inspiration from Classical, maritime Empire of Carthage :).

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I hope you don't mind me listing a few suggestion below.

Certainly, I've looked over your suggestions and criticisms, and I certainly agree / have learned from them. I'll be making some corrections soon in reflection of this feedback.

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As you can see, my critique is mostly fitting together some of the minor joints at this point, since the story itself as a satisfying rise and end. The characters, while very much in the "epic" tradition (larger-than-life speaking patterns, philosophical discussions, etc.) feel interesting and show some of their personalities through interaction with each other. I can only hope they'll continue to be fleshed out as the stories go on.

Cheers!

I appreciate your critique, Godspeed! It's good to hear that you think I'm on the right path with these iterations!

I know I mentioned that I wouldn't be sharing any further progress on this story.
However, I might share the prologue for further opinions. I'd be curious to know what others think about it.  ;D
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Art & Fiction / Re: Born of Ashes and Embers (Ver. III, Chapter I Completed)
« Last post by Sir_Godspeed on November 13, 2019, 11:45:13 AM »
It's been a while since I dipped my feet in writing and feedback, but your persistence deserves attention.

First off - thanks for the enjoyable story. While it's the first chapters of presumably several, it does feel like somewhat of a finished arc - though I did grasp for some additional context at times. Even if the conflict was fairly clear, the barrage of names made it a bit difficult to keep it all in order at times.

Speaking of context, I see you called this an original story, but I think I recognized the name Qarth from A Song of Ice And Fire? Is it set in that universe, or did you just borrow the name?


I hope you don't mind me listing a few suggestion below.


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“Sadly, none of us are so young anymore, are we?” Azat grinned wolfishly and earned rumbling laughter from the stoic veterans. But good men must sacrifice what little they have, so that great men may build better futures. Courage, iron, and steel are the weapons of good men. Prosperity, equality, and quality of life… these are the weapons of great leaders, tyrants and kings.

The above paragraph has a second part (from "But good men..." and onwards) that seem like it should be in dialogue marks, since it does not fit with the tone of the narrative voice of the rest of the text. The narrator in the story is mostly very direct and to the point, whereas this line seems a lot more poetic, which felt jarring.

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Then they continued to wait in the cold desert night in silence. Only a smoldering flame was allowed at the campfire, but the Zarquin huddled around its warmth as if they would freeze in its absence.

This might just be a pet peeve of mine, but new paragraphs should generally start with new thoughts, events, etc. "Then" is a narrative conjunction of sort, tying the new thought together with the previous thought, signifying continuity. I would slot with paragraph together with the last paragraph to make it flow more easily.

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“I’ll cover the both of you!’ Avedis loosed volley after volley into the masked Qi. Several warriors were forced to limp out of the fight back toward their blazing village. A handful of others laid sprawled on the earth from his attacks. “Get your hides out of there!”

The first of several minor technicalities, but I believe a "volley" refers to several arrows or missiles being fired. As Avendis is just one person, presumably just letting loose one arrow or javelin at a time (I forgot which - does it mention?) it would not really be a volley.


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“Worse than that,” Aslan folded his arms and watched the remaining key scamper out of the mountain pass. “There’s a detachment of Kharan Half-Giants headed straight for Reaper’s Lantern. I think you met their emissary?” He gazed down upon the headless corpse at his feet. “Quite the diplomats, eh?”

I think "remaining key" is a misspelling, right? Did you mean to put "remaining Qi"?

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The stitched together hides of a pair of Lantern Tigers draped the otherwise bare upper body. The hides were crafted in such a way that either tiger head graced both of his shoulders. Their lolling tongues slid down his arms and their eyes gazed off in opposite directions.

This is another technicality, and I might be wrong in this, but I can't imagine a properly flayed animal skin keeping the tongues in. For one thing, tongues are good food, and secondly, and perhaps more importantly, they are wet tissue, which rots quickly, especially in a desert/hot environment. Generally, pelts like these will be completely devoid of wet tissue. That being said, maybe there is some cultural statement going on here that I'm unaware of - although other readers would be so too.

As you can see, my critique is mostly fitting together some of the minor joints at this point, since the story itself as a satisfying rise and end. The characters, while very much in the "epic" tradition (larger-than-life speaking patterns, philosophical discussions, etc.) feel interesting and show some of their personalities through interaction with each other. I can only hope they'll continue to be fleshed out as the stories go on.

Cheers!
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The Space Tavern / The Navy
« Last post by The GrimSqueaker on November 11, 2019, 07:08:20 PM »
Fun Youtube videos about ships, battles, and hilarity.
Drachinifel - YouTube - Drachinifel

British,very low key while utterly sarcastic.

Start with this one: Kamchatka - Guide 151 - YouTube - The Kamchatka. A ship so hated within its own squadron they cheered when they thought it was sinking.
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Projects Blog / Re: Dread's Corsair army
« Last post by magenb on November 10, 2019, 03:05:28 PM »
sweet 'naut, well done Dread.


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Projects Blog / Re: Dog of War's Multiple Army Project (Ork, Nurgle, Eldar, Dark Eldar)
« Last post by Dread on November 9, 2019, 12:33:30 PM »
Oh boy do I love it. How many ultra smurfs did you have to "CRUSH THHA BONES, GRIND THE TEEF'S! to make the blue.
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